Ache
deep hole.
Loss means pain.
It must be
so
even if you
are a tooth too far gone?
But why does
the jaw, neck, eye, and head hurt?
In sympathy?
A drum beats..
miss you
tooth.
(double Tetractys--1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3,
2, 1-- for Mini Sunday on http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/.)
5 comments:
I can definitely feel your pain here, Judy.
This is an excellent poem, conveys deep loss. Good job with the double Tetractys. It seemed made for this poem.
Great Judy. Both concrete (ouch for your tooth) and more metaphorical about all kinds of loss. I like how you did the form as well. I will have to try this one as it looks easy to understand at least. (the form)
Excellent, Judy. I feel the pain from here.
Well done, Judy - your poem's pain is palpable.
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